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Scootaloo stared down at herself silently. Regret flooded her as thoroughly as the tears that slid down her face. "There was so much I was gonna do…I never found my special talent in life and earned my cutie mark…I never thought it would end like this. Applebloom, Sweetie Belle, and I were all going to do it together. This is a nightmare…" The thought quieted her. This was a nightmare and that was all that it could be. She rounded on the mare, eyes narrowed. "This is messed up, ya know that?! What gives you the right?! Why?!"

It had been countless centuries of the same question. The mare closed her eyes and thought for a moment, wondering how she still never quite had a good answer. After a moment her eyes opened and extended one of her wings as if to beckon the filly near. "I wish I had a better answer, but this isn't a nightmare, Scootaloo. You…you fell asleep and the temperature dropped so suddenly.  There was nothing anypony could have done…" As she spoke she slowly came closer, the heartache in her eyes deepening as, as countless times before, the filly began to beg.

"NO!" she screeched, rearing and striking the mare with her front hooves. "No, please! Please, I'll be anything you want. I'll never break any of Rarity's form models, I'll never sneak cupcakes at Sugarcube Corner, I'll even go back to the orphanage…Please…" The momentum in her voice waned into sobs as she felt her front legs collide with the old mare's body. The mare didn't cry out in pain or try to defend herself. What she did was much worse, and Scootaloo broke into fresh sobs as the mare tucked her wing over her broken body and lowered her head to gently nuzzle her muzzle. "I'll do anything…please…I don't want to die…"

Quiet dominated the small room. The only sounds were that of Scootaloo, quietly crying into the coat of the mare. Occasionally the mare would softly shh or soothe her, but otherwise said nothing. The filly was right in that it was not fair. To have lived alone for so long and to perish alone without purpose to life was cruel. It was also why she was here.

It was a long time before Scootaloo found her voice again. Turning to look at her body, she addressed the mare. "What happens now?" She turned her gaze up at the ancient Alicorn and tried to quell the tremor in her voice, "Am I going to hell? I never…I never found my special purpose…I never did anything with my life…The last thing I did…" She bit her lip and took a moment to collect herself again, fresh tears breaking. "I told Applebloom I was going to be first to find it and we got in an argument. That's the last thing I ever said to one of my best friends…"

"Scootaloo?"

The filly looked up at the mare, but it hadn't been she that had spoken. Her eyes widened as the sickening realization sunk in and she turned to face the door. Applebloom stood there and she could hear Sweetie Belle following not far behind. They had only just bounded in and hadn't spotted her yet, but the yellow filly persisted unaware of what had happened. "Scootaloo, ya sleepy slowpoke - didja forget about the meetin' today?" Sweetie Belle squeezed in and shot Applebloom a reproaching look before looking around the room. It was still only just morning, but finally she found her friend in the corner. "There you are! Why're you still asleep? That's unusual for you, Scoot, usually you're the first one up!"

Applebloom rolled her eyes and smiled. "Guess Ah`m gonna be the first tah get mah cutie mark than, huh Scootaloo?" She tossed her scarlet mane and grinned wider and approached her still sleeping friend. "But seriously - yah gotta get up now Sc-…" Only once she got close did she go quiet.

That was  enough to worry Sweetie Belle. Neither of her friends was ever this quiet normally. "Applebloom?" she queried, taking a step toward her. Her friend didn't say a word, but sank to her haunches, eyes still transfixed on Scootaloo. The beginnings of panic started to sneak in, but she forced herself to move to her friend's sleeping form and gently place a hoof on it. "Scootaloo…it's time to get up…" Ice met her touch. The velvety coat was now rigid and cold and her frame hard from the onset of rigor mortis. "Scootaloo…this isn't funny…Scootaloo…please get up…wake up! Wake up! Please!" Her voice rose in volume and pitch as she began to shake her friend, screaming louder and louder to arouse deaf ears that could not hear her. Finally there were no words, just a wordless wail of horror and grief as she began to choke on her own tears.

Then pain. Pain erupted in her jaw and she reeled, stunned into silence. Applebloom stood over her, tears steaming down her face as she fought to regulate her breathing. She looked up at her silently, but the question was almost audible in her face. Why? Applebloom took a deep breath before helping her to her feet and gently sitting her down. The emotions still ran too high for her to form words, but Applebloom had somehow found them.

"Stay here with Scootaloo. I'm gonna go get mah sister. Stay here…j-just in case…in case she…" No. She couldn't lie to her only remaining friend. She couldn't paint a pretty picture with Scootaloo's blood to make it all better. She took a step back and then turned and ran, yelling back, "Stay here!"

Sweetie didn't need to be told that now, not once or twice more. Turned back to look down at Scootaloo and lay down beside her, trying to warm her with the heat from her body. "H-hush now….q-q-quiet now…it's time…t-to lay your sleepy head…" she softly sang, before breaking into tears anew.

And all the while Scootaloo hid her face in the mare's chest, unable to stand as her body convulsed with sobs. Far off she could still hear Applebloom calling for help. She could still hear Sweetie Belle trying to wake her. Only then did she know they could not…for she could never wake up again.
My second chapter. It always gets worse before it gets better.
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:iconmarcleine:
Marcleine Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're so evil..(joking)... How could this get worse? It's only a miracle I'm not crying yet.....
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GeroRRA Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Oh god. Every time something new came up in the story, it's like you thought "how can I make this sadder?" I was just holding myself together until Sweetie Belle started singing.
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jigglysinger Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Damnit... I managed a straight face untill Sweetie Belle started singing :cries:
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
It only gets worse from here! :la:
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Fallenpeach Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
My god..
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:iconkenseicoal:
KenseiCoal Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
I just got done reading MLD and now I am on this... Why do I do this to my self?
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KadzieONayl Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
You are going to need medical help.
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SonofaTimeLord Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
YOU BASTARD! WHY WOULD YOU WRITE SOMETHING LIKE THIS
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
Yer welcome! <3
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SonofaTimeLord Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
I'm considering adding you to the list of people to kill for their amazing things that give me emotions. I'll pencil you in just underneath Joss Whedon.
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AzureKaryu Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012
Manl- OH FUCK IT I CANT HAVE MANLY TEARS RIGHT NOW T.T WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
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LayserA Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm leaking!!
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deathnotefan88 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
damn... why did that song have to come on the radio... it made this too much to bare...
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
SPOILER ALERT!!!


she softly sang,
-It underlines the power of this scene that she is singing the song as it was originally intended to be sung (not that the motown version wasn't Awesome, even in its irony).
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jtylerg Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
I never actually tear up when reading things like this.. not even during My Little Dashie... But when she started singing "Hush now, Quiet Now" my eyes watered...
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PrincessMolestia Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
Listening to "Who do you voodoo, bitch?" from Dead Island really makes this story better.
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FabiotheTurtle Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
I've cried twice now. You, monster, you...

Very good...
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Squirdgle Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012
"It aroused deaf ears that could not hear her."

You might want to fix that. A bit redundant, isn't it? Either way, excellent so far! Continuing on...
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ArcticFox501 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
wtf why
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:iconmrmantacos:
Mrmantacos Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
Goodness I am a terrible person. That or I am traumatized, because I laughed D: giggle at the ghosties?
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DemonPanther Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
I think the reality of the situation hitting those two fillies was the hardest part for me...
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BlackSwanized Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
3rd last sentence, typoed hear.

Off I go, to the next chapter >>
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
I'm glad you caught that... I missed it. XD
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Pinkie321Pie Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:iconmanlytearsplz:
WHY?
WHY DO YOU MAKE ME CRY?
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mlpMaconMixx Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
"Stay here with Scootaloo. I'm gonna go get mah sister. Stay here…j-just in case…in case she…" No. She couldn't lie to her only remaining friend. She couldn't paint a pretty picture with Scootaloo's blood to make it all better. She took a step back and then turned and ran, yelling back, "Stay here!"

This. Powerful stuff. Amazing writing.
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Rhymeheart Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am saddened...
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:iconmadman12000:
madman12000 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Honestly, sometimes it doesn't get better
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
Tell me about it. Fun fact - I wrote the bit about them finding her from personal experience. Finding the body of a loved one is an experience I would not like to repeat.
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
Reminded me of the Buffy episode where she finds her mom on the couch, and keeps imaging they save her...
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darkorcidea Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
I feel the sadness of this story but it's not possible for me to cry seeing as i can't basically
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jelfes Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You. You're amazing. I sincerely cried at the line,
"Sweetie didn't need to be told that now, not once or twice more. Turned back to look down at Scootaloo and lay down beside her, trying to warm her with the heat from her body. "H-hush now….q-q-quiet now…it's time…t-to lay your sleepy head…" she softly sang, before breaking into tears anew. "

That was beautiful, thank you for making this. Tears are literally rolling down my cheeks, that has never been evoked in me by a fic, only watering eyes, never actual tears. But, this... this is just over powering my ability to handle emotions, and it feels so good and bad at the same time.

Again, beautiful.
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Scottfra Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
Awe man... i'm tearing up.
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Yomo415 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Why did Scoot assume she was going to hell? Has she been helping Pinkie make cupcakes?
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EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
When I was loading this chapter I was actually thinking "Man, its going to suck for the other two finding Scoot dead in the club house". Indeed it did.

There was a bit of confusion as to who was talking to or facing towards who when AB, SB, dead Scoot, spirit Scoot, and reaper alicorn were all there.

Your still a monster.
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
The test results said I was a horrible person. It was kind of weird, since we weren't even testing for that...
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EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
Do I want to know what you were testing for?
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011
Some kind of agility course or something. They just kind of handed me a gun and told me to jump off a ledge. I don't remember a lot after that, but I woke up in Texas with a file saying I was a horrible person and that I was slated for return. XD
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DucksUnlimted Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
This is the first time I've actually shed manly tears. The whole time, just water. Darn you author!
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Emperor-Eclair Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
I had watery eyes when the story started, but then the singing made me lose it.
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Zaeqon Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Student Digital Artist
NOT THE SINGING! NOT THE SINGING T.T
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rain-hatchett Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OH my gosh, Sweetie please don't start sining! ;_____;
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GaruuSpike Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
DX

So emotional. Oh, Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, if only you had figured it out and given her a place to stay for the coming winter... maybe this wouldn't have happened.

Scootaloo's dead. Gone. Forever.
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Foxxyfox789 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
WAAAAHAHHAHAAAA! :(
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MagicaITrevor Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
N-NOT THE SINGING! PLEASE DON'T SING! Not... Not now... :iconcryforeverplz:
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FredAnaglyph Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
is it bad that i laughed when they found her?
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fuegofandango Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
You are a horrible person and I hope you go to pony hell. No, it's fine. I sort of found it terribly inconvenient too.
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TakenPony Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Well then same to you that you said to FredAnaglyph. "You go to pony hell, you go to pony hell and you die!"
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fuegofandango Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
I didn't laugh though, I just found the timing to be impeccable.
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ninthsphere Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
Oh Sweetie Belle, please don't sing... you'll make me... T^T
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