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The moon was chillingly beautiful. The young filly watched it silently; a rare moment of reverence for her normally exuberant personality. A chill ran through her tiny frame and she pulled the thin material closer around her fledgling wings, trying to trap her frail body heat beneath the scarlet cape and emblem. A smile pulled at the corner of her mouth as her lavender eyes caught sight of the insignia. The symbol glittered in the moonlight, tendrils of frost having begun to collect on the surface of the cape. Winter was coming - and soon.

Her eyes fell away from the frost as she dismissed it. So what if it was cold? The filly nestled closer betwixt the wooden beams of her residence and closed her eyes tight in defiance. There was no time to worry about that now. Now it was time to sleep. Every filly knew the moon meant that, and even she didn't have the energy to fight its silent nocturne. "Goodnight, mom. Goodnight, dad. I love you…" she called out softly. The answer was the same every night. Silence; only broken by the creaking of the aged structure warping with the change of season. The eerie creaks of the empty room would have frightened most, but this was her clubhouse. Unknown to her two best friends, it had also been her home for several months now.

Scootaloo curled into herself and tried to will herself to sleep before the cold could set in  and keep her awake. Fitful hours passed before she hazy lapse into unconsciousness took her trembling body, and with a final exhale of steam rising from her mouth she fell asleep.

Sunrise brought with it a new world. The tiny frost crystals had seemingly taken seed and overtaken the landscape. It was as if the world had been waiting too long for too little and suddenly allowed its need to flood the earth with a bone chilling cold. Dawn cascaded through the foliage surrounding the small structure, the gentle rays illuminating everything but the tiny huddled figure in the farthest corner of its shelter.

As early as it was, she would not expect anypony to be out looking for her. The gentle nudge that slowly brought her to consciousness came as a shock, and she started as her eyes snapped open and rose to meet the gaze of the mare looming over her. A yelp broke forth from her as she tried to push herself to her feet and clamber back away from the stranger. "What the hay?! Who are you?!" She cried, eyes widening as the adult took a step closer.  As the surprise wore off, her tone turned to annoyance as she took note the sun had not even barely risen yet through the clubhouse window. "What the hay lady, why'd you wake me up? The sun isn't even all the way up!"

Only then, taking back control of her situation did the filly take a good look at the stranger. The mare looked like an Alicorn, old and worn far past even what Celestia looked like. Her pelt had faded drastically through age and had a dull luster of muted grey to it. Her wings hung low at her sides now, the feathers thin and barren; only soft down clinging to them. Her mane shone no stars or celestial decadence, but draped around her like a white cowl, solemn and straight. What took Scootaloo aback the most was the horn. It had been snapped in two, with thin hairline cracks running through it. They all fell to a point just above her eyes; the saddest brown eyes that Scootaloo had ever seen, that had fixated down upon her.

Meeting those eyes caused a lump to rise in her throat, and she struggled to swallow it before wrenching her gaze away and casting a sidelong glance at the Alicorn. "W-who…who are you…and w-why'd you wake me up?" The mare stood silent for a few moments more before she closed her eyes and bowed her head, shaking it slowly. "Scootaloo…I'm so sorry…b-" "How'd you know my name?!" The mare winced at the outburst before stomping a hoof resolutely to silence the filly and continue. "I'm so sorry…sweetie…I didn't wake you. You never woke up this morning."

The tension in the air almost made her choke on the lump. Tears stung her eyes as she shook her head and took another step back. "You're lying." she whispered, her voice unintentionally harsh as she continued to back away. It was then her hoof hit something solid. She expected the sound of it meeting wood, but it only made a dull thud as it collided with the object. Slowly, she turned her head to see what it was. She felt ill as her heart fell deep into her stomach and she stared, transfixed at the tiny bundle that lie there. It was wrapped in her cape. Its visage was marred by the violet tendrils of its mane. It was her, and it wasn't breathing anymore.
Nopony expects to go to sleep and never wake up. It happens all the time, but you never expect it to happen to you. Not today. But everypony's time comes eventually...just some sooner than they were intended. At least - that's how it happened for Scootaloo.


Edit: For anyone who may have wanted an audio: [link]
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TwilightSparkle023 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
I have already read this story but it was so well written that I had to come back and read it again. (mind you it was also the first fic that made me cry.) I really did try not to come back. But I had to.
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Xip3rheartsLuna Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
Is there somewhere I can download the full story as a whole?
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bronystorms Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Wow, this is great writing. You had me in tears by paragraph 3!
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Fallenpeach Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I love how you write. So beautiful but so sad..
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Pimsleurable Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
This is a beautiful story.
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StrandedGeek Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
Oh heck no... that's I'm pulling the plug here and now, I quit I don't care what happens you killed off a mane char and that was your first mistake.

:iconericcartmanplz: :iconsaysplz: "Screw you guys...I'm going home!"
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
GAHDAMMIT Cartman! Get your fat ass back here! XD
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Blockblast Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
:iconericcartmanplz: :iconsaysplz: I'm not fat, I'm big boned, my momma tells me so!
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Strabatz Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
....oh-oh..no...
no...no! NO!!!

This is TOO SAD [link]

respect...here, you can has a tear ._.
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RosesFalling Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Scootaloo.... why? ;A;
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Pony-Cheif001 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
nice story BUT WHY :[
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SonofaTimeLord Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
Already crying. DAMN YOU
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:iconamberlepu:
AmberLepu Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
It only gets worse! :iconlaplz:
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takohiko Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
i LOOOOVE this story ^^ <3 good job ^^
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rainbowdashsuperb Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Scootaloo is the 2nd best character in the mlp series. Rainbow dash is first, close call between them though (because of this story)
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rainbowdashsuperb Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this story is really sad. the first thing to ever make me tear up with emotion. i think if i listen to it again i will end up actually crying.
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PTEntertainment Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Already brought a tear to my eye
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SuperBrony79 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing Literature, although youre gonna wanna remember to start another separate paragraph everytime there is dialouge! :iconpinkiepieplz:
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TikiTiel Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
MUST. HAVE. :iconmoarplz:
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Timontim01 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
Dude... I just read this story, and now... I'm depressed. Thanks for making the saddest story ever, although it was great. You're an artist.
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LayserA Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I promised myself I wouldn't cry! I'm tryin- *sniff* trying!
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deathnotefan88 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
... so sad... when reading the last paragraph... it felt like I was having a heart attack... my heart literally stopped beating for a few seconds... why do I have the urge to read more...
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BronyHaterSlayer Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Student Filmographer
I'm guessing the alicorn she met was Death? I didn't know Death would be so compassionate.
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lookman3733 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
it a christian death that way
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espion400 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
"Winter was(/is) coming" - I have heard that before, but where?

Anyway, great story. Very well written.
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Sorasshadow1 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Captivating and off to a rather shocking start....I sense more tears than were shed for "My Little Dashy" are coming. I love Scootaloo, she's my favorite filly.
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drunkendolphin77 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This+ Dead Island theme.

Jeez, did someone pour water on my face!?
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PrincessMolestia Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
i was going to make a Dead Island reference, but goddamn you, you beat me to it.

plus, it would be better if Scootaloo was Sam B. and when that alicorn chick scared her, she smashed her face in. With a sledghammer. That electrocutes her.
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ArcticFox501 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
omg why
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theREALamddude Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
omgwut sadness
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DemonPanther Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
2nd time through and it still makes me cry...
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anzul Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Student General Artist
dude....
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DarkApostleMatt Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
ಥ_ಥ
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GeneralRex Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Darn it i'm gonna read this just before bed and this'll probably end up like when i read cupcakes.... wishing I'd been smarter and hadn't.... O WELL =P
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alanjcastonguay Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011
Manly tears.
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small3907 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
it's sad story :cry:
but i really like it :love:
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Pinkie321Pie Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Oh god, you're gonna make me cry aren't you?
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mlpMaconMixx Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
NOOOOOOOOOOoOooooooooo!!!! Oh Celestia, I'm going to have to watch myself, or I am going to be crying IRL before I get to the end of this one. I don't think I've ever felt so moved to sadness by a fanfic, and this is only part 1! I'm not even completely sure I can keep reading. :'(
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haimerej9 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
*manly tears start welling up*

...fuck...

*starts sobbing*
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Rhymeheart Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Fuck....
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:iconarianarocks1234:
arianarocks1234 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
*sniff sniff* noooo not scootaloo noooooooooooo
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
So sad
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TheMusicDude3 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Student General Artist
i is now sad. awwww.
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volcano-bakemeats Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
I was reading this series, and this song came on my Pandora station. [link] Alarmingly good fit. Messed me up something fierce.
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klShadowDragon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
This is a pretty good opening chapter. The only issue is paragraph structure. Dialogue should be broken up into separate paragraphs when you have two characters talking. Rather than having all their lines in a single paragraph.
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zoroark09 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Professional Writer
As most people probably found you, I took a peek at your work(s) 'Final Dreams of a Filly', and I just absolutely adore this story.
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Testsubject75 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
you know, this story really did make me think, about life and death, it sorta put things into perspective for me, your a great writer, it takes a lot to make me cry
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FabricIsRetarded Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This. Is. BEAUTIFUL.
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richfiles Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
It's nigh impossible to hold back those manly tears with this looping...
[link] "A Bit of Happiness", from .Hack/Sign
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EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Normally, Scootaloo sits very low on my likable ponies list. Heck most of the villians rate higher than her. Then here you go and make me feel for her. Now I want to hug her, take her in, and make her my vegetable munching, sentient, flying dog alternative (she better damn well be house broken).

Im going to go ahead and transplant the long running gag of "JAKE YOU FUCKING MONSTER!" (in regards to Jake Heritagu and his Silent Ponyville series (we loved the work but he had Fluttershy get smashed around and sad)).

So without further adieu. *ahem*
DONNA YOU FUCKING MONSTER!!

(I liked the chapter really grabs ye olde heart strings)
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